📝 题目
Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
有些人认为在现代世界中我们更相互依赖,而另一些人认为人们已经变得更加独立。讨论这两种观点并给出你的意见。
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引言段
People have different views about whether we are more or less dependent on others nowadays. In my view, modern life forces us to be more independent than people were in the past.
中文翻译:人们对如今我们是否或多或少地依赖他人持有不同看法。在我看来,现代生活迫使我们比过去的人更加独立。
这一段是怎么开头的?作者没有直接照抄题目,而是用 'People have different views about...' 巧妙改写,这就是考官喜欢的 paraphrase。紧接着第二句直接亮明观点:'modern life forces us to be more independent',一个 forces us to 用得非常有力度——不是'让我们',而是'迫使',立场鲜明。两句话完成'回应题目+表明立场',非常高效。
dependent on · 依赖于 forces us to · 迫使我们
让步段
There are two main reasons why it could be argued that we are more dependent on each other now. Firstly, life is more complex and difficult, especially because the cost of living has increased so dramatically. For example, young adults tend to rely on their parents for help when buying a house. Property prices are higher than ever, and without help it would be impossible for many people to pay a deposit and a mortgage. Secondly, people seem to be more ambitious nowadays, and they want a better quality of life for their families. This means that both parents usually need to work full-time, and they depend on support from grandparents and babysitters for child care.
中文翻译:有两个主要理由可以论证我们现在更加相互依赖。首先,生活更加复杂艰难,尤其是因为生活成本急剧上升。例如,年轻人在买房时往往依赖父母的帮助。房价比以往任何时候都高,没有帮助,很多人不可能支付首付和房贷。其次,如今人们似乎更有抱负,他们想为家人提供更好的生活质量。这意味着父母双方通常都需要全职工作,他们依赖祖父母和保姆的帮助来照顾孩子。
这一段是经典的让步段写法。注意作者用 'There are two main reasons why it could be argued that...' 引出反方观点,语气委婉,不直接说'有人觉得',显得更高级。然后两个论点都用了具体例子支撑:买房靠父母、双职工靠祖辈带娃。这里 cost of living、dramatically、deposit and a mortgage 都是非常地道的搭配。记住:雅思写作不是喊口号,而是要用'抽象论点+具体例子'的组合。
dependent on · 依赖于 cost of living · 生活成本 dramatically · 急剧地 rely on · 依靠 deposit and a mortgage · 首付与房贷 ambitious · 有抱负的
主论段
However, I would agree with those who believe that people are more independent these days. In most countries, families are becoming smaller and more dispersed, which means that people cannot count on relatives as much as they used to. We also have more freedom to travel and live far away from our home towns. For example, many students choose to study abroad instead of going to their local university, and this experience makes them more independent as they learn to live alone. Another factor in this growing independence is technology, which allows us to work alone and from any part of the world.
中文翻译:然而,我同意那些认为如今人们更加独立的人。在大多数国家,家庭正变得更小更分散,这意味着人们不能像过去那样指望亲戚。我们也有更多自由去旅行和远离家乡生活。例如,许多学生选择出国留学而不是上本地大学,这段经历让他们学会独居,变得更加独立。这种日益增长的独立性的另一个因素是技术,它允许我们独自工作,在世界任何地方工作。
这一段是全文的核心论证段。开头用 'However' 一转,明确站到自己这边。作者给了三个层次的理由:①家庭变小、更 dispersed,所以没法依赖亲戚;②出国留学让人学会独居;③技术让人远程工作、独自办公。注意这三个理由从'家庭结构'到'个人经历'再到'科技影响',层层递进。句型也很丰富:定语从句、举例、比较结构全都有,这就是9分作文的论证密度。
dispersed · 分散的 count on · 指望 growing independence · 日益独立
结论段
In conclusion, while there are some reasons to believe that people now depend on each other more, my own view is that we are more independent than ever.
中文翻译:总之,虽然有一些理由认为人们现在更加相互依赖,但我自己的看法是我们比以往任何时候都更加独立。
结论段再次展示高分技巧:先用 'while there are some reasons to believe that...' 承认反方合理,再用 'my own view is that...' 重申自己立场。这种'让步+重申'的结构让结论显得 balanced 又不模糊。最后 'more independent than ever' 也比第一段更强烈,首尾呼应,收尾有力。
depend on · 依赖 independent · 独立的
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