📝 题目
Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
有些人认为在大学或学院学习是通往成功事业的最佳途径,而另一些人认为毕业后直接工作更好。讨论这两种观点并给出你的意见。
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引言段
When they finish school, teenagers face the dilemma of whether to get a job or continue their education. While there are some benefits to getting a job straight after school, I would argue that it is better to go to college or university.
中文翻译:当完成学业后,青少年面临着是找工作还是继续教育的两难选择。虽然毕业后直接工作有一些好处,但我认为上大学是更好的选择。
开头段怎么写?Simon用了'face the dilemma of whether...or...'这个句式,一句话就把两种选择的矛盾点出来了,比泛泛地说'people have different views'精准得多。接着用'While there are some benefits..., I would argue that...'做让步+亮观点,这个结构在9分作文里反复出现,因为它天然就是Discuss both views的模板骨架。两句话完成开头,干净利落。
dilemma · 两难困境 I would argue that · 我认为
让步段
The option to start work straight after school is attractive for several reasons. Many young people want to start earning money as soon as possible. In this way, they can become independent, and they will be able to afford their own house or start a family. In terms of their career, young people who decide to find work, rather than continue their studies, may progress more quickly. They will have the chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen profession. This may lead to promotions and a successful career.
中文翻译:毕业后直接工作这个选择有几个吸引人的原因。许多年轻人想尽快开始赚钱。这样他们可以变得独立,能够负担自己的房子或组建家庭。在职业方面,选择工作而非继续学习的年轻人可能进步更快。他们将有机会获得真实经验和学习与所选职业相关的实用技能。这可能带来晋升和成功的职业生涯。
这段写反方观点的好处。注意Simon没有贬低对方,而是用'attractive for several reasons'客观承认其吸引力,这叫fair discussion。然后给了两个层次:经济独立(赚钱买房成家)和职业发展(积累经验、快速晋升)。每个论点都有展开,不是列清单。'rather than continue their studies'这种插入语也让句式更丰富。这就是9分的论证密度——不堆砌大词,但每个观点都讲透。
attractive · 有吸引力的 gain real experience · 获得真实经验 practical skills · 实用技能 promotions · 晋升
主论段
On the other hand, I believe that it is more beneficial for students to continue their studies. Firstly, academic qualifications are required in many professions. For example, it is impossible to become a doctor, teacher or lawyer without having the relevant degree. As a result, university graduates have access to more and better job opportunities, and they tend to earn higher salaries than those with fewer qualifications. Secondly, the job market is becoming increasingly competitive, and sometimes there are hundreds of applicants for one position in a company. Young people who do not have qualifications from a university or college will not be able to compete.
中文翻译:另一方面,我认为学生继续深造更有益。首先,许多职业需要学历资格。例如,没有相关学位不可能成为医生、教师或律师。因此,大学毕业生能获得更多更好的工作机会,而且他们往往比学历较低的人挣得更多。其次,就业市场正变得日益竞争激烈,有时一个职位会有数百名申请者。没有大学或学院学历的年轻人将无法竞争。
这是全文的核心论证段。用'On the other hand'转回自己立场,然后'Firstly...Secondly...'清晰分两层。第一层:学历是硬门槛,举了医生、教师、律师三个例子——不举一个也不举十个,三个恰到好处。第二层:就业市场竞争激烈,用'hundreds of applicants for one position'这个具体数字感来加强说服力。注意'have access to'和'be able to compete'这些搭配,全是学术英语的标配。整段没有生僻词,但论证逻辑滴水不漏。
more beneficial · 更有益的 academic qualifications · 学历资格 have access to · 能够获得 increasingly competitive · 日益竞争激烈
结论段
For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that students are more likely to be successful in their careers if they continue their studies beyond school level.
中文翻译:综上所述,在我看来,如果学生在中学毕业后继续深造,他们更有可能在职业生涯中取得成功。
结论段只有一句话,但信息量很大。'For the reasons mentioned above'呼应前文论证,'it seems to me that'保持审慎语气(不说I firmly believe),'more likely to be successful'重申立场但留有余地。Simon的结尾哲学:不画蛇添足,把前面的论证浓缩成一句话收尾。很多考生纠结结尾要多写,其实简洁有力的结论反而更高分。
For the reasons mentioned above · 综上所述 more likely to · 更有可能
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