📝 题目
The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
老一代人往往对人们应该如何生活、思考和行事持有非常传统的观念。然而,有些人认为这些观念对帮助年轻一代适应现代生活没有帮助。你在多大程度上同意或不同意?
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引言段
It is true that many older people believe in traditional values that often seem incompatible with the needs of younger people. While I agree that some traditional ideas are outdated, I believe that others are still useful and should not be forgotten.
中文翻译:许多老年人信奉的传统价值观似乎常常与年轻人的需求不相容。虽然我同意一些传统观念已经过时,但我认为其他一些仍然有用,不应被遗忘。
这道题是To what extent do you agree,Simon选择了partly agree的策略。开头用'It is true that...'承认事实,然后用'While I agree that..., I believe that...'这个黄金句式一箭双雕:既让步承认部分传统观念确实过时,又坚持另一些仍然有价值。这种'辩证立场'比一边倒更难写,但分数更高,因为它展示了critical thinking。记住这个句式,partly agree题型的万能开头。
incompatible · 不相容的 outdated · 过时的
让步段
On the one hand, many of the ideas that elderly people have about life are becoming less relevant for younger people. In the past, for example, people were advised to learn a profession and find a secure job for life, but today's workers expect much more variety and diversity from their careers. At the same time, the 'rules' around relationships are being eroded as young adults make their own choices about who and when to marry. But perhaps the greatest disparity between the generations can be seen in their attitudes towards gender roles. The traditional roles of men and women, as breadwinners and housewives, are no longer accepted as necessary or appropriate by most younger people.
中文翻译:一方面,老年人对生活的许多观念对年轻人来说正变得越来越不相关。例如,过去人们被建议学习一门专业并找一份终身稳定的工作,但今天的工人期望从职业生涯中获得更多的多样性和变化。与此同时,围绕人际关系的'规则'正在被侵蚀,年轻成年人自主选择与谁结婚以及何时结婚。但也许两代人之间最大的差异在于对性别角色的态度。男性和女性的传统角色,即养家者和家庭主妇,不再被大多数年轻人认为是必要或合适的。
这段写'哪些传统观念确实过时了'。Simon给了三个层次:职业观念(终身职业→追求多样)、婚恋规则(父母之命→自主选择)、性别角色(男主外女主内→平等)。三个层次从浅到深递进,最后用'perhaps the greatest disparity'引出性别角色这个最有冲击力的例子。注意'are being eroded'这个被动进行时,暗示变化正在发生且不可逆。'breadwinners and housewives'这对词组极有画面感,一个词就勾勒出传统家庭模式。
less relevant · 不那么相关了 variety and diversity · 多样性与变化 eroded · 被侵蚀 disparity · 差异 breadwinners · 养家者
主论段
On the other hand, some traditional views and values are certainly applicable to the modern world. For example, older generations attach great importance to working hard, doing one's best, and taking pride in one's work, and these behaviours can surely benefit young people as they enter today's competitive job market. Other characteristics that are perhaps seen as traditional are politeness and good manners. In our globalised world, young adults can expect to come into contact with people from a huge variety of backgrounds, and it is more important than ever to treat others with respect. Finally, I believe that young people would lead happier lives if they had a more 'old-fashioned' sense of community and neighbourliness.
中文翻译:另一方面,一些传统观念和价值观确实适用于现代世界。例如,老一代人非常重视努力工作、尽自己最大努力以及对自己的工作感到自豪,这些行为确实能让年轻人受益,特别是当他们进入当今竞争激烈的就业市场时。其他可能被视为传统的品质是礼貌和良好的举止。在我们全球化的世界里,年轻人会接触到来自各种背景的人,以尊重对待他人比以往任何时候都更重要。最后,我认为如果年轻人拥有更加'老式'的社区感和邻里之情,他们会过上更幸福的生活。
这段是作者真正的立场——传统观念中仍然有价值的部分。又给了三个层次:职业道德(努力工作、精益求精)、人际素养(礼貌尊重)、社区意识(邻里之情)。注意这三个层次跟上一段形成完美对称:上段写'过时的'三个,这段写'仍适用的'三个,结构工整。'attach great importance to'比'think is important'高级太多,'come into contact with'比'meet'更书面,'globalised world'把礼貌的必要性提升到全球化高度——这就是9分作文的格局。
applicable · 适用的 attach great importance to · 非常重视 taking pride in · 以...为豪 globalised · 全球化的 neighbourliness · 邻里之情
结论段
In conclusion, although the views of older people may sometimes seem unhelpful in today's world, we should not dismiss all traditional ideas as irrelevant.
中文翻译:总之,虽然老年人的观念在当今世界有时似乎没有帮助,但我们不应将所有传统观念视为无关紧要而加以摒弃。
结论段一句话收尾,但浓缩了全文精华。'although...seem unhelpful'承认部分传统确实不适用,'we should not dismiss all...as irrelevant'重申核心立场:不能一刀切。注意'dismiss...as...'这个搭配,意思是'把...当做...而打发掉',非常精准地表达了'不应该简单否定传统'的态度。结尾不用'I believe'或'in my opinion',而是用'we should not'这种带有呼吁性的表达,更有说服力。
dismiss · 摒弃
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