📝 题目
Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?
如今,许多人互相交流的方式因技术而改变。技术以哪些方式影响了人们建立的关系类型?这是一个积极还是消极的发展?
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引言段
It is true that new technologies have had an influence on communication between people. Technology has affected relationships in various ways, and in my opinion there are both positive and negative effects.
中文翻译:新技术确实对人与人之间的交流产生了影响。技术以多种方式影响了人际关系,在我看来,这既有积极的影响,也有消极的影响。
这道题有两个问号:一是'技术如何影响关系类型',二是'积极还是消极'。Simon开头两句话同时回应两个问题:第一句'have had an influence on communication'回应'如何影响',第二句'both positive and negative effects'回应'积极还是消极'。这就是9分作文的task response——不跑题、不漏问。'It is true that...'这个开头结构Simon反复用,因为自然、不突兀,直接进入话题。
have had an influence on · 对...产生影响 both positive and negative · 既有积极也有消极
主论段一
Technology has had an impact on relationships in business, education and social life. Firstly, telephones and the Internet allow business people in different countries to interact without ever meeting each other. Secondly, services like Skype create new possibilities for relationships between students and teachers. For example, a student can now take video lessons with a teacher in a different city or country. Finally, many people use social networks, like Facebook, to make new friends and find people who share common interests, and they interact through their computers rather than face to face.
中文翻译:技术对商业、教育和社交生活中的关系都产生了影响。首先,电话和互联网让不同国家的商务人士无需见面就能互动。其次,Skype等服务为师生关系创造了新的可能性。例如,学生现在可以跟不同城市或国家的老师上视频课。最后,许多人使用Facebook等社交网络结交新朋友、寻找志同道合的人,他们通过电脑而非面对面地交流。
这段回答第一个问题:技术如何影响关系类型。Simon用三个领域来组织:商业(跨国合作)、教育(远程教学)、社交(网络交友)。'Firstly...Secondly...Finally...'清晰标层次,每个都给了具体例子。注意'without ever meeting each other'这个短语——它点出了技术改变关系的本质:从'面对面'变成了'不见面'。最后一句'through their computers rather than face to face'也是伏笔,为下一段讨论'这是好是坏'做铺垫。
had an impact on · 对...产生影响 create new possibilities for · 为...创造新可能 share common interests · 志同道合 rather than face to face · 而非面对面
主论段二
On the one hand, these developments can be extremely positive. Cooperation between people in different countries was much more difficult when communication was limited to written letters or telegrams. Nowadays, interactions by email, phone or video are almost as good as face-to-face meetings, and many of us benefit from these interactions, either in work or social contexts. On the other hand, the availability of new communication technologies can also have the result of isolating people and discouraging real interaction. For example, many young people choose to make friends online rather than mixing with their peers in the real world, and these 'virtual' relationships are a poor substitute for real friendships.
中文翻译:一方面,这些发展可以是极其积极的。当交流仅限于书信或电报时,不同国家的人之间的合作要困难得多。如今,通过电子邮件、电话或视频的交流几乎和面对面会议一样好,我们中的许多人无论是在工作还是社交场合都受益于这些交流。另一方面,新通讯技术的普及也可能导致人们被孤立、阻碍真正的交流。例如,许多年轻人选择在网上交友而非与现实世界中的同龄人交往,这些'虚拟'的关系远不如真正的友谊。
这段回答第二个问题:积极还是消极。Simon用'On the one hand...On the other hand...'一正一反,客观讨论。正面的论据:技术让跨国合作从'写信等几周'变成'视频即时沟通'。反面的论据:技术让人躲在屏幕后面,'virtual relationships are a poor substitute for real friendships'——这句话太精辟了,一个'poor substitute'就把虚拟关系的本质点透了。注意两个对比:'limited to written letters or telegrams' vs 'email, phone or video','make friends online' vs 'mixing with their peers in the real world',正反两面都用对比来加强说服力。
extremely positive · 极其积极的 limited to · 局限于 isolating · 孤立 discouraging · 阻碍 a poor substitute for · 远不如
结论段
In conclusion, technology has certainly revolutionised communication between people, but not all of the outcomes of this revolution have been positive.
中文翻译:总之,技术无疑彻底改变了人与人之间的交流,但这场革命的结果并不全是积极的。
结尾一句话,但层次极为丰富。'revolutionised'这个词用得好——不是changed,不是improved,而是'revolutionised'(革命性地改变),一个词就概括了技术对交流方式的颠覆性影响。后半句'not all of the outcomes...have been positive'呼应开头'both positive and negative',首尾一致。注意'not all'这个表达——不是说'all are negative',而是'并非全是积极的',留有余地,这才是critical thinking。
revolutionised · 彻底改变 outcomes · 结果
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