📝 题目
Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
一些曾经入狱的人后来成为了好公民,人们经常认为这些人是向青少年讲述犯罪危险性的最佳人选。你在多大程度上同意或不同意?
✍️ 满分范文
It is true that ex-prisoners can become normal, productive members of society. I completely agree with the idea that allowing such people to speak to teenagers about their experiences is the best way to discourage them from breaking the law.
中文翻译:刑满释放人员确实可以成为正常、有生产力的社会成员。我完全同意这样的观点:允许这些人向青少年讲述他们的经历,是阻止青少年违法的最佳方式。
这道题是To what extent do you agree,Simon选择了completely agree(一边倒)。开头第一句'It is true that ex-prisoners can become normal, productive members of society'先破除偏见——坐过牢的人也能成为好公民。第二句直接亮明立场'I completely agree',一个'completely'表明毫不含糊的态度。'productive members of society'比'good people'高级太多,'productive'暗示他们能为社会做贡献。开头两句话,一句破偏见、一句亮立场,效率极高。
ex-prisoners
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刑满释放者
productive members of society
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有生产力的社会成员
discourage them from
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阻止他们
In my opinion, teenagers are more likely to accept advice from someone who can speak from experience. Reformed offenders can tell young people about how they became involved in crime, the dangers of a criminal lifestyle, and what life in prison is really like. They can also dispel any ideas that teenagers may have about criminals leading glamorous lives. While adolescents are often indifferent to the guidance given by older people, I imagine that most of them would be extremely keen to hear the stories of an ex-offender. The vivid and perhaps shocking nature of these stories is likely to have a powerful impact.
中文翻译:在我看来,青少年更容易接受那些能以亲身经历说话的人的建议。改过自新的罪犯可以告诉年轻人他们是如何走上犯罪道路的、犯罪生活的危险,以及监狱生活的真实面貌。他们还可以打消青少年可能持有的关于罪犯过着光鲜生活的幻想。虽然青少年往往对长辈的指导漠不关心,但我想他们中大多数人会非常渴望听到前罪犯的故事。这些故事生动且可能令人震惊的特质,很可能产生强大的影响力。
这段论证为什么刑满释放者是最好的教育者。核心逻辑是:青少年不听大人说教,但会被真实故事震撼。注意几个层次:第一,'speak from experience'——亲身经历的分量远超空洞说教;第二,'dispel any ideas about criminals leading glamorous lives'——打破青少年对犯罪生活的浪漫幻想;第三,'indifferent to the guidance given by older people' vs 'extremely keen to hear the stories of an ex-offender'——对比说教和故事的差异。'vivid and perhaps shocking'这个搭配暗示:故事的震撼力本身就是最好的教育。
speak from experience
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以亲身经历说话
Reformed offenders
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改过自新的罪犯
dispel
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打消
glamorous
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光鲜的
indifferent to
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漠不关心
powerful impact
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强大的影响力
The alternatives to using reformed criminals to educate teenagers about crime would be much less effective. One option would be for police officers to visit schools and talk to young people. This could be useful in terms of informing teens about what happens to lawbreakers when they are caught, but young people are often reluctant to take advice from figures of authority. A second option would be for school teachers to speak to their students about crime, but I doubt that students would see teachers as credible sources of information about this topic. Finally, educational films might be informative, but there would be no opportunity for young people to interact and ask questions.
中文翻译:用改过自新的罪犯来教育青少年了解犯罪的其他替代方案会逊色得多。一种选择是让警察去学校跟年轻人交流。这在告知青少年违法者被抓住后会怎样方面可能有用,但年轻人往往不愿听从权威人物的建议。第二种选择是让学校老师跟学生谈犯罪问题,但我怀疑学生是否会把老师视为这方面信息的可靠来源。最后,教育片可能有教育意义,但年轻人没有机会互动和提问。
这段用排除法论证:其他方案都不如刑满释放者好。Simon给了三个替代方案,逐一批驳:警察——年轻人不愿听权威说教;老师——缺乏犯罪经历不可信;教育片——不能互动提问。每个方案都先承认有可取之处('could be useful'),再指出致命缺陷,这种'先让步后反驳'的写法让论证更公允、更有说服力。'reluctant to take advice from figures of authority'和'credible sources of information'这两个短语极为地道,前者解释了青少年心理,后者点出了教师讲犯罪的先天不足。
alternatives
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替代方案
reluctant to
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不愿
figures of authority
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权威人物
credible sources
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可靠来源
informative
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有教育意义的
In conclusion, I fully support the view that people who have turned their lives around after serving a prison sentence could help to deter teenagers from committing crimes.
中文翻译:总之,我完全支持这样的观点:那些在服刑后重新做人的人可以帮助阻止青少年犯罪。
结尾一句话收束全文。'fully support'呼应开头的'completely agree',立场前后一致。'turned their lives around'是本文的金句表达——比'reformed'更有画面感,暗示人生方向的180度转变。'deter...from committing crimes'与开头的'discourage...from breaking the law'形成同义替换,同一意思用不同词表达,这就是Lexical Resource的满分表现。记住:结论段不需要新观点,只需要重申立场+换个说法。
turned their lives around
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重新做人
deter
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阻止