📝 题目
The bar chart below shows the average monthly rainfall in millimetres in four cities across different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
📊 图表内容说明
分组柱状图，四城市四季降水量(mm)。City A夏季最高(180mm)冬季最低(20mm)；City B四季均匀(50-70mm)；City C春季最高(120mm)；City D秋季最高(150mm)，夏季几乎为零(5mm)。
✍️ 满分范文
The bar chart compares the average monthly rainfall, measured in millimetres, across four cities during different seasons.
简洁改写：across different seasons→during different seasons，补充单位millimetres。
Overall, rainfall patterns varied considerably among the four cities. City A and City D exhibited extreme seasonal variation, while City B received relatively consistent rainfall throughout the year. City C had moderate variation with a spring peak.
将四城市分为两组：极端变化组(A/D)和稳定组(B/C)。这种分组概括是Band 8+的组织能力体现。不引用数据。
City A experienced the greatest seasonal fluctuation, with summer rainfall reaching 180mm — the highest figure on the chart — compared to merely 20mm in winter. City D showed a similar pattern but in reverse, with autumn being the wettest season at 150mm and summer being almost dry at just 5mm, the lowest recorded value.
描述极端变化组。City A用'greatest seasonal fluctuation'概括，给出最高最低数据。City D用'similar pattern but in reverse'巧妙连接——同一模式但季节相反。
In contrast, City B's rainfall remained notably stable across all four seasons, ranging from 50mm in winter to 70mm in autumn. City C had a more moderate pattern, with spring receiving the most rainfall at 120mm, while the other seasons averaged between 40mm and 60mm. Notably, the difference between the wettest and driest seasons was far more pronounced in Cities A and D than in Cities B and C.
用In contrast转入稳定组。City B用'ranging from...to...'给出范围。末句跨城市对比波动幅度差异——回归overview的分组逻辑。
📚 核心词汇
fluctuation (波动)
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描述变化幅度
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seasonal variation (季节性变化)
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专业表达
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notably stable (显著稳定)
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替换consistent
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pronounced (明显的)
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替换obvious/clear
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moderate (适度的)
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描述中等程度
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wettest/driest (最湿/最干)
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对比最高级
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🏆 高分句型
rainfall patterns varied considerably
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用于概括整体趋势，引出下文具体比较。varied considerably强调差异显著，比different更生动。可替换为：differed greatly / showed marked differences.
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exhibited extreme seasonal variation
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描述某事物具有极端季节性变化，exhibit比show更正式，适合图表作文。可替换为：displayed dramatic seasonal changes / underwent extreme seasonal shifts.
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the highest figure on the chart
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用于强调数据中的最大值，后常接数据或补充说明，使信息突出。可替换为：the peak value on the chart / the maximum figure recorded.
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a similar pattern but in reverse
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表示两个趋势方向相反但结构相似，用于对比分析，简洁清晰。可替换为：a mirrored pattern / the opposite yet similar trend.
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the lowest recorded value
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用于指出最低数据，与最高值形成对照，增强数据描述准确性。可替换为：the minimum figure recorded / the lowest point of all.
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remained notably stable across all four seasons
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强调数据波动小、全年平稳，notably体现这一特点突出。可替换为：remained highly consistent throughout the year / stayed fairly constant across seasons.
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far more pronounced in... than in...
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用于比较两个对象间的差异程度，far more pronounced使对比更强烈。可替换为：much more evident in... than in... / considerably greater in... than in...
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